Star, the sly huntress of the Lightwings

Hi Tiny,

Welcome to DRF! Have some cake!

I am Sly, your somewhat friendly character mod, and I will be reviewing your app. Before you begin, I would recommend you give a brief look over our New Members Guide to give you a brief background on what goes on in this site. The Comprehensive guide to character creation is also a good way to give you an idea on how to create your characters.

And now for your app.

First of all, you are required to have a minimum of 5 sentences for your personality. Expand on this further.

Is there a reason why your character is an odd mix of 5 of 7 different tribes we have? Okay, so she looks like an Icewing, has webbed feet (Seawing), large wings (Skywing?), and chilly bright breath? (Icewing + Lightwing). Being of Skywing heritage is not necessary to have large wings, if that is what you're thinking, or Seawing heritage for webbed feet (unless one of her strengths is her swimming ability) but I'm also struggling to find any Nightwing trait of hers. Be sure to give your character the bare necessities, rather than excessive traits that does not relate to them much.

For your strengths, you are required to at least describe your character's speed and physical strength. I notice she is good at hunting and tracking. Does this mean she at least excels in speed but forfeits strength for such a trait? If so, be sure to give us her average and top speed. If her average speed is 80mph, then you will have to keep the Skywing heritage, but because you are not of purebred Skywing, you cannot have their maximum top speed (170mph). Due to the small inheritance of Skywings, I would probably accept no more than 90mph.

Bump when ready.

She is an odd mix of the 5/7 tribes, because I wanted her to have the traits of the dragon tribes that I admired. For example, I wanted her to be a big dragon (why I choose her to be mostly Icewing and Lightwing), be able to swim well, and breathe underwater (why I choose her to have some Seawing). Also, the undersides of her wings are glittery (proof of her Nightwing heritage). Also, I thought that under personality, it said MAXimum of 5 sentences(I need to learn to read XD, and this cold I have isn't helping either). I don't think that she has any excessive traits about her. She is the perfect dragon for me to rp. Later on as I get used to rping as a dragon, I may make a new dragon that's more basic. I will also edit what is required.

I see...

Nightwings arent known for their glittery underbellies though so that is redundant. Be sure to make it clear that she is a good swimmer and such, because once your app is approved, you cannot bring in extra information not detailed here or made clear enough for readers such as myself.

Sly she meant she was going to edit it right now, but she had to do some chores and stuff so right now she is nearly done with the editing. I know this since Tiny is my twin sister.

Really that this app got reviewed before mine, even though mine was posted yesterday? Sigh.

@Hiro,

Im sorry to hear about that but please bear in mind that we are currently understaffed and are mending some issues so your app would have disappeared from recent topics. To get our attention again, please bump your app. Please dont post in another persons app to complain about this as this is an inappropriate place for it.

PM the staff or speak to them in the cbox if you have any issues.

Well she has asked around on the chat I think like I did. Also its best if you change the topic name to something obvious like have your characters name then in parenthesis say "Needs Approving" this draws the mods eyes to all the applications that need approving so they can read them and maybe accept them.

Edited!

You still need to describe her physical strength in the strengths category. How much weight can she carry at most and how strong are her strikes?

I don't know her strengths or how much weight she can carry, because I don't know what the average damage an icewing or lightwing inflicts or how much weight they can carry. ;-; Also, Nightwings have glittering undersides of their WINGS not their bodies. Just wanted to point that out because it seems that you misread. ;-;

Okay...

Just ignore the strength bit then. It should seem alright as the app is.

I dont see where in our guide that states all Nightwings have glittering underside of their wings. Hence, it still seems redundant to me that you need to include a Nightwing heritage regardless.

Either way, you can freely edit that one out or not while you wait for the second approval.

APPROVED 1/2

NightWings with glittery wings is from Wings of Fire, Sly.

Special Abilities

'She can breathe a very bright, chilly, frostbreath.'

Could you explain this a bit more? How cold it can reach, how far it is shot, what effect it has on a dragon, ect.

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Bump when ready.

Bump!

Approved