Nathar, the Shattered One

Type: NightWing
Name: Nathar
Alias: The Shattered One
Age: The equivalent of a 146 year old human.
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Heterosexual.
Personality: Before he became a Corrupted, he was a happy, normal dragon. His interests in magic led him to try and fuse himself with an abnormally large amount of magical energy in order to gain more power. The fusion was a success, but the extreme magical influx caused his mind to become shattered and split into many pieces. He now feels only pain and constantly feels like he is suffocating or being crushed. He is sometimes taken over by the magical energy in his body and his split mind switches his personality in an instant. One moment he could be talking like a normal dragon, but the next he could be trying to kill whoever is near him. The next he could by cowering in the corner like a hatchling, unable to defend himself.
Fears: His biggest fear is himself. He fears that he will never be accepted or cured. The only possible way he could be cured of his corruption is the blessing of a god, but he doesn't know this. He fears rejection but he will never stop trying to be accepted even though every dragon he has met hates or shuns him. Even his parents can't stand the sight of him even though they want to help and still love him.

Weaknesses: He cannot feel any wounds, illnesses, or poisons because he already feels constant pain. His physical body is incredibly weak and he looks like he's been half dead for a long time. His mind is in a weak and splintered state as well. His eyesight is completely gone due to a physical malformity caused by magic corruption. Physical attacks can be deadly when they hit his unprotected body.

Strengths: His magical abilities are almost unparalleled except by the demigods themselves. He is amazingly powerful when it comes to any offensive magical ability. Because of the magic he infused into his mind and body, and the energy that he feeds on as a result of his fusion with the magical realm his magical reserves are almost unlimited. He has amazing echolocation as a result of the loss of his sight. He no longer needs to eat, drink, or sleep as a result of his feeding on magical energy around him.

Height: 67 ft
Scales: His scales are small, but strong almost chainmail-like armor. He has these scales over his whole body.
Eyes: His eyes cannot be seen, but they are a vibrant, electric, blue.
Appearance: He has a sickly purple shade over his whole body with some blue, purple, and black running through it in random patterns. He secretes a corruptive black fluid from his mouth and eyes. This liquid has a density similar to blood, but is textured and colored like an oil spill. His skin and scales are pullet taught to his bones and muscles, and he looks like he's been starved for a very long time. His wings are torn and beaten up, but he can still fly. His jaw constantly hangs open letting the black fluid drip out, but his voice somehow still comes out in a raspy quiet hiss.

Tribe: NightWing
Inheritance: 66% NightWing, 34% IceWing.
Rank: NightWing Engineer/Scientist/Magical Experimenter
Family:
Mother: Kendra-NightWing
Father: Thomas-IceWing
Siblings: None.

Defensive Special Abilities: He can spew a corruptive black liquid from his mouth that causes physical maladies and other injuries. Usually it is a corrosive or a burning effect that causes convulsions and extreme pain. Convulsions are generally experienced up to one or two posts after initial contact. He can create strong shields. The shields last for up to a minute of a dragon's strongest breath attack, and they can take up to 10 full strength physical attacks of any kind. His shields also keep him from leaving as they encase him in a bubble like shield. He can form incredibly real illusions and the only way to tell that you'd be talking to one is when they flicker or shimmer. He usually tries to use these illusions to hide his deformed and horrifying body from others. Illusions can also be used to strike fear into others and to hide him in even the most dire situations. These illusions only affect the sense of sight. They usually last for 3 posts when being projected at full strength, but if he's not focused on making them look real they can last longer(up to 5 posts), but will have more flaws. This will make them more recognizable even to non magic users. Illusions affect all who are looking a them and act more like a 3D projector than anything. They are not physical objects and can be passed through by physical beings, and they do not frighten the viewer unless the viewer is afraid of what is being projected.

Offensive Special Abilities: His offensive magical abilities are extremely powerful and allow him to conjure and control elements, and manipulate non-organic matter. His elemental attacks can be controlled by another elemental magic user using the same element. If he happens to be using different elements in combination either element could be removed from his control by a dragon using the same type of elemental magic. So in order to completely stop him from using all elemental magic  you'd need to have one dragon for each element, but he cannot use multiple elements to string together attacks. He can only use one attack at once, but he can combine multiple elements into an attack. So he could do a burst of wind(air element) with ice spikes(water element) whistling through it, or he could raise up rocks from the ground(earth element) and have them burst into flames on impact(fire element). He can combine up to three elements in one attack.

Combat style: He will use his magical abilities to utterly destroy his opponents in the most painful way possible as fast as possible. A normal magic user can take him on, but it will be much more difficult than having a companion. A non-magic user will have a much easier time with him. If they hit him before he gets a shield up or after his shield goes down they can easily kill or maim him.

History: He left his parents at the normal age to become a student of one of the greatest magicians of all time. During his studies he discovered fusions, and he spent many years creating a setup where he could fuse his body with massive amounts of magical energy without any consequences. Due to a flaw in his methods and the information he had learned the infusion went wrong and the magic corrupted him completely despite his experimental environment.
RP Sample: Nathar approached the dragon limping up to it. His voice came out in a rasp, "Help, me..." The other dragon spots him and takes to the air in a frenzy of fear at the sight of such a horrible being. Nathar curls up on the ground and cries for a while mourning his twisted form.

"His magical abilities are almost unparalleled except by the gods themselves. He is amazingly powerful when it comes to any magical ability. His magical reserves are almost unlimited."

In your history you state he left his parents "at the normal age" to become a student and learn magic. So 18 years old? Right now he's 23. Five years of study is not nearly long enough to have developed a nearly unlimited magical capacity and abilities so strong that almost basically only a full god could stop you. That's pretty overpowered.

"He is amazing powerful when it comes to any magical ability."

You've only mentioned his use of shields and elemental magic. What other magical abilities does he have? You need to list them all. Also, how many elemental attacks can he use at once and how powerful are they?

How long does it take for one to start experiencing convulsions after coming into contact with the black liquid he spews?

Please address these and if you have any questions, I'd be happy to answer them.

I've expanded upon his abilities and hopefully now he's ready.

He will use any and all magical abilities within his power to utterly destroy his opponents in the most painful way possible as fast as possible. It would take multiple normal dragons to take him down, but a semi or full god could take him down with limited struggle. He can form incredibly real illusions and the only way to tell that you'd be talking to one is when they flicker or shimmer. He usually tries to use these illusions to hide his deformed and horrifying body from others. Illusions can also be used to strike fear into others and to hide him in even the most dire situations. These illusions only affect the sense of sight. His spells are extremely powerful when in use, but he has to learn them first of course. His knowledge of spells when he starts out after five years of studies is limited to shields and illusions, but over time he learns elemental magic and other types.

If he is able to use illusions, this should be mentioned in special abilities. How long do these illusions last? And if he currently has only mastered Shields and illusions, then his element magic should be very weak. And what other types of magic will is he going to have? Finally, his magic shouldn't be so powerful that it only semi and full gods can take him down without effort if all he has mastered so far is Shields and illusions.

Changed: Shield strength, see defensive special abilities. Age. Weaknesses vs. physical. Battle difficulty, see combat style.

It would take multiple normal Dragons to take him down with little struggle, or a semi or full god to take him down with almost no struggle.

Whether you mean normal as in magic users or non, this is overpowered. It shouldn't take multiple non magic users to take you down since physical attacks is your biggest weakness. And it shouldn't take any effort at all for a semi or full god to take you down, so remove that.

A normal magic user can take him down but it will be much more difficult than not having a companion or two.

Two magic users, maybe, but if the one is experienced enough, they shouln't need help. Three is too much..

He will use any and all magical abilities within his power to utterly destroy his opponents.

Again, if he uses any magic/spells besides elemental, illusions, or shields, it should be listed.

Illusions can be used to strike fear into others.

How an how long can you keep them in the illusion?

Details have been added and removed hopefully as requested. Thanks for the help.

Haven't forgotten about this, I just wanted to read it over a few times and make sure everything else was good.

Much better! Now just a few last little things. First, his illusions. If he's not focused on making them look real, they can last longer. How much longer? You still have in combat style that he will use any and all magical abilities that he knows. Maybe reword that to say he will use his magical abilities. Finally, in strengths, his magical abilities are almost unparalleled except by the gods and demigods. I'd say just demigods.

Also, I'm aware I'm not using Baldi. But the site was doing that weird thing where I log out of one account and login on another but for some reason it keeps me on the first account.

I added in the amount of posts for his less powerful illusions, and I changed the other two things. Thanks for being patient with this one.

You're quite welcome. And for your patience, I shall reward you with an approval!

Approved