Helanaii. [COMPLETE.]

by Helanaii Fri Apr 29, 2016 2:27 pm

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[Art belongs to me, do not use without permission!].

Personal Info

Name: Helanaii

Alias: Helan.

Age: 47

Gender: Female

Sexuality: Straight

Personality: Varies and depends heavily on situation and surroundings. She is either calm, gentle, and sweet; she may be found wicked, fierce, and cold.

Interests: Nature is her love. With this being said she lives out her life with an adventurous mood; always exploring the unknown that fancies her taste. As peculiar as this creature is, Helanaii really enjoys observing dragons and humans from afar, similar to today's version of people watching. That observance is not just for fun though; Helan is growing more aware of her interest in males. She may act completely savage towards some that she finds to her disliking, but honestly enjoys the attention.

Dislikes: Her breed lacks anything magical, they are Guardians as it is. Helanaii personally does not believe in magic, any source that is used around her she views as work of demons and will most likely react in an extremely negative way, something others would most likely find horribly odd with her. She also has a strong distaste for large groups of dragons, or humans especially if they are stomping through the forests and disturbing a peaceful afternoon for her. As much as she enjoys observing these strange beings from afar, interactions with them are certainly not her favorite. Only when she accepts them will she pay them attention.

Fears: As her past is a long one, many fears have managed to creep into her life as she continues to age. Her largest fear of course are males like any sane female would hold. Falling into second place on that list would be being captured and re-domesticated into serving the humans which had designed her breed. If something else could creep it's way onto that list as well, it would most likely be the darkest nights when not even the moon is visible. Being alone in the dark drives her mind to insanity, something is always moving out there.

General Appearance

Height: This female in particular boasts a frame built unlike any other. She stands 10 ft. at the shoulder yet her body stretches out to a maximum of 35 feet from nose tip to tail. Typically much shorter than what you may usually find out in the world, but her build has a fierceness that makes up for her lack of height.

Scales: This beast fails to sprout any scales but is instead covered with a thick hide, incredibly thick and durable plates from her skull crown down over her spine, and sharp thorn-like spines that rake down her neck and torso, extending into her tail as well.

Eyes: A dazzling hazel.

Appearance: A written description will always prove to be a challenging task for this creature as there are many details that shouldn't be missed, especially if they are crucial to mention in battle or taunts. This description will start from her very skull to her useful tail.
Helanaii had the best traits picked from a newer breed of Guardian from her father side to keep these traits more dominant, but her mother still has bloodlines more closely related to those of older guardians. A streamline skull was the end result, ending in a finely black-tipped beak that is sharp and strong enough to puncture scales and hide alike. Unlike the backwards pointed, serrated teeth that many dragons cary, Helanaii has conical fangs; similar to beasts that strictly feast on fish. They are horrible with slicing into flesh, but are more useful for grabbing onto her prey, especially if it squirms around. Two long, black horns wrap around the side of her thicker skull which she will often use like a battering ram when threatened much like the wilder Bulls. The horns begin a short distance after her deep espresso plates sprout from the center of her snout. They protect her skull, spine, and a distance of the top of her tail. When crushing blows are attempted to be delivered upon her, Helen's own armor serves as her own protection. Along the sides of her cheek also begin shorter thorn-like spines that are connected deep into her tissue even though they appear to be loosely attached to her pine green derma. These flex inwards and outwards depending on her mood. They begin on her lower jaw and remain in four rows while climbing down her neck and over the rest of her entire torso. They are strong and sharp enough to ward off attackers and give them second thoughts of attempting to take a chunk out of her. Within her neck and rest of her body are steel-strengthened muscles that add immensely to her weight and pack a heavy punch to her blows. They wrap around her skeleton in a humbly manner, giving her the appearance of being softer than what she actually is. Her limbs are extremely well-matched in strength. They are thick and stocky, though her forearms are shorter than her hind legs which eliminate an all-out run on fours, they too are just as powerful. She will occasionally lift her drooped body up with her feathered wyvern like wings to even herself up and add to a more fiercer position. On her hind feet she has two enormous sickle claws. She may be unable to leap into the air for attack, but diving out of the sky and fending off opponents work just as well. Since sickle claws are not actually thin like a knife on the inside, no tearing can come from them. They are most likely used to puncture prey or foe and cause massive internal bleeding and hemorrhaging.

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Tribe Information and Status

Tribe: None.

Inheritance: Purebred; she carries both the newer and older breeding traits in her species.

Rank: Rogue/Loner.

Family: None

Mate: None

Hatchlings: None

Skills and Abilities

Strengths: Helanaii has been selectively bred solely for successfully guarding and perfected for battle. She is an excellent fighter with the ability to take on beasts almost twice her size with ease. As gifted physically as she is, this female also has access to a brilliant mind. Her observant manner has allowed her to absorb intelligence that would be crucial for her survival. This ranges from manipulating others to fighting. Her fiery attitude and mental strength allow Helan to continue on when her energy has long ago left her, ultimately boosting her stamina in a way and making her more of a relentless pain to fight, or when she's feeling cuddly. Her body build alone provides a very large list of strengths and advantages she would have over typical western dragon breeds. Considering flight, two sets of wings improves her ability to gain altitude quicker, increase her lift and acrobatic flight patterns, and overall leave her to excell in being a better glider, climber, and diver.

Special Abilities: None.

Weaknesses: Though her breath smolders and is "hot," her breed allows only males to breathe the affective fire. This certainly is frustrating for her when she has nothing to throw at her opponents from a distance. Having four wings brings added weight to her body which can prove a problem when attempting to escape situations. Despite having a tough hide covering her body, she has an extremely soft and tender underbelly. It would be more comparable to a silky squishy blanket than anything you would see on a typical dragon. Another weakness she carries is her occasional hot-headedness. She carries a lack of respect to all who have not earned it from her which can cause her to get into fights where she is a bit outmatched.

Combat Style: close-range combat, hand to hand aka: tooth to claw. Wrestling, battering, and mauling.

Background

Breed: Guardian

Breed description: The Guardians are a breed that are undying, long ago they were compare able to the Western drakes but through selective breeding became their own subspecies. They are not like the Giants that classify themselves as forest guardians which try to protect every living thing but instead had been bred to literally guard royalty or important prized possessions. They had to become fiercer creatures in battle and evwntually the humans used them for war more than to protect others. They are taller, leanwr, and well-muscled. This is the modern breed.The older breed had been used to pull carts and carriages, and acted more like the King's pet dog if anything. They were short and stocky, and now are quickly becoming replaced with their preferred cousin. On either sides, they still possess many of the same qualities. They have undying loyalty to their masters or mates, they stress the importance of family, they will use their fighting abilities only as a last resort, they are bold, strong, and courageous.

Breed appearance:

MALE: image FEMALE: image

Lineage: Helanaii has a modern bred father and a mother that still carries some of the heavier original traits. Of course they had been in domesticated captivity, something Helan barely remembers, so the rest of her Lineage remains unknown.

History: With origins that remain for the most part unrecognizable, the young dragonness had spent her years seaking out a territory and a large chunk of land for herself. She achieved a large forest and range of mountains, though other dragons also claim it all as her own, they recognize she will most likely win against them of they cause any problems. Her life had been a peaceful one. There was no need for interactions in regard to the tribes which was among the largest of her concerns. The forest and mountains were far enough away for her to have an easy time. As her years began to increase however, Helanaii began to find herself craving a mate more often. She made sure to mark her territory well enough that any male of interest passing through would get the hint. Other than that, nothing note able had occurred to her other than an average life. She had no dramatic encounters or serious unresolved hatreds. Things were looking very well for this pine beast.

RP Sample: The sun just barely began to peek the first morning rays over the forested land, causing the atmosphere to become a thick hazy grey across the off-colored canopy tops. A distant call of a bird marked the time and began to rouse the world from a deep slumber, it was the only sound that broke the serenity and it carried far off into the distance. Soon it was joined with a number of other birds until the once silent forests became bustling with life. Underneath the canopy scratched the mice and squirrels as they dug around for a food source. Some of the larger life forms continued to rest in despite of the ruckus from their noisier neighbors.
Through the thicket echoed the calming sounds of a soft water trickling along the creek which attracted the early rousers to wet their pallets and put a fresh start to their day.
A small herd of deer followed by a number of rabbits and other rodents collected to munch on a spot of greener grass. The deer quickly stopped their grazing and alerted themselves, rotating their ears like satellite dishes to detect the sound of laden foot falls. A sweet scent hung in the air, collected on the dewdrops, which made the rest of the prey animals uneasy as well. It was something all too familiar to them.
When the thick foliage began to rustle, the older does didn't hesitate to throw their white flags into the air and retreat back into the forest, they were quickly followed with the younger of the group.
The creature that disturbed the lush ferns stepped out in a sluggish manner. It towered over the sprinting fauna and certainly ranked itself as an apex predator. The sun just began to beam down onto the clearing, warming the darker plated that covered the fearsome creature.

Helanaii lazily reached the waters edge and scooped her body down low, lapping her tongue into the water and lifting her curved beak until she had her fill of the chilling goodness. It made undulating goose flesh ripple up her forelimbs which allowed a slow tired smirk to play at her lips. A heavy shake was the reaction to which she would get, causing her to stand once more. Satisfied, the female retreated to the woods herself to begin the tasks of the day. Mainly that involves marking her boundaries and playfully bothering the orange forest dweller, Tefearion.
A steady beating of four enormous wings bashed into the air while she initiated a strong blood flow through her body. The air was still cooler outside of her cave set deep within the mountain, but it delighted her nontheless.
She descended into the shadows and melted into her surroundings, leaving only the soft sound of her heavily padded feet tapping the ground to echo in the distance. A soft hush fell over the forest as the giant began its own day.

by **Ignatius Sikum** Sat Apr 30, 2016 10:09 am

Hello! Welcome to Dragon Roleplaying Forum! Let me welcome you here to the site and just have a few things to fix up before you can get started to join us.

Firstly, I would like to give you the link to the new members guide, here you will find the link to a character application form which we highly recommend you stick to and follow. http://www.rpgdragons.org/t3556-the-new-member-s-guide

Secondly, there are a few things which also need to be changed with your app. To edit your app, click on the edit button near the top of your app, the third button in the line.

Helanaii wrote:Personality: Varies and depends heavily on situation and surroundings. She is either calm, gentle, and sweet; she may be found wicked, fierce, and cold.

The personality needs to be at least 5 sentences, go into some more detail with this.

Helanaii wrote:This female in particular boasts a frame built unlike any other. She stands 10 ft. at the shoulder yet her body stretches out to a maximum of 35 feet from nose tip to tail. Typically much shorter than what you may usually find out in the world, but her build has a fierceness that makes up for her lack of height.

You state that she is of this size, but the colours which you have chosen for her match the EarthWings description. This species is much larger than the 10 feet from her shoulders. You also need to change this height so it is the total height, not just to her shoulders. It has to be to the top of her head/horns. Without the proper height, I we cannot tell what tribe she is in nor her height.

Helanaii wrote:Scales: This beast fails to sprout any scales but is instead covered with a thick hide, incredibly thick and durable plates from her skull crown down over her spine, and sharp thorn-like spines that rake down her neck and torso, extending into her tail as well.

In this section, you need to state the arrangement of the scales AS WELL AS the colour of them. Add the colour of your scales to this section.

Helanaii wrote:Inheritance: Purebred; she carries both the newer and older breeding traits in her species.

Awesome! But.. you need to state what species she is from, which can be found in the new members guide. The colours of your dragon will also match the original species that they are from.

Helanaii wrote:Rank: Rogue/Loner.

No, the rogue isn't considered to be a rank. The rogue is what you will put under the "Tribe" section. Rogues are dragons who live outside of the protection of their tribes. So, for example, a rogue FireWing wouldn't live with the tribe of FireWings. Therefore, classified as a rogue because he doesn't live with its original kind, the FireWings.

Helanaii wrote:Considering flight, two sets of wings improves her ability to gain altitude quicker, increase her lift and acrobatic flight patterns, and overall leave her to excell in being a better glider, climber, and diver.

I want you to tell me how much better she is. What speeds can she go to? How fast can she turn without blacking out?

Helanaii wrote:Weaknesses: Though her breath smolders and is "hot," her breed allows only males to breathe the affective fire.

Alright, where did she get the ability to breathe fire? She can ONLY have this if she is part of the FireWing tribe, or is a FireWing rogue. If she is part of this, it needs to be stated in the inheritance section, as well as what they are a hybrid with. For example, 10% FireWing 90% EarthWing.
The Fire breath is also needed to be stated in the strengths if you want to keep it.
In your weaknesses, I want you to also state if ranged attacks are a weakness, because your dragon seems to have nothing going for them in terms of defending against ranged attacks.

Helanaii wrote:Breed: Guardian

Breed description: The Guardians are a breed that are undying, long ago they were compare able to the Western drakes but through selective breeding became their own subspecies. They are not like the Giants that classify themselves as forest guardians which try to protect every living thing but instead had been bred to literally guard royalty or important prized possessions. They had to become fiercer creatures in battle and evwntually the humans used them for war more than to protect others. They are taller, leanwr, and well-muscled. This is the modern breed.The older breed had been used to pull carts and carriages, and acted more like the King's pet dog if anything. They were short and stocky, and now are quickly becoming replaced with their preferred cousin. On either sides, they still possess many of the same qualities. They have undying loyalty to their masters or mates, they stress the importance of family, they will use their fighting abilities only as a last resort, they are bold, strong, and courageous.

Breed appearance:

MALE: image FEMALE: image

Lineage: Helanaii has a modern bred father and a mother that still carries some of the heavier original traits. Of course they had been in domesticated captivity, something Helan barely remembers, so the rest of her Lineage remains unknown.

Firstly, we do NOT offer these 'Guardians' as a species. If you read the members guide, there you will find a list of dragon tribes which you are able to be a part of. You may not introduce a new species other than the ones which are outlined here.
It seems that you are confusing the ranks for these tribes. Seeming you stated that you don't want her to join a tribe and therefore she is automatically going to be a rogue. This being said, you still need to put what breed your dragon is in it's inheritance section.
Keep in mind, that you will need to change your app to the one which is linked in the New beginners guide. All apps must be in the same format as the one given from this guide.
You MUST have the guide in the format given in the new members guide. If this format isn't changed to match the one given in the new members guide, I will not accept it.

After you have read the new members guide, I would like you to edit this app so it matches the guide's example of creating your dragon (I'll also put it here to make sure you can find it http://www.rpgdragons.org/t100-create-your-dragon-template ). Then I want you to fix all the things which I have found that your app can use improving with.

Bump when ALL of this is edited.