creating my dragon template

Name: Cynder
Alias: As she grows, she will take many on to sneak around
Age: Not hatched yet/depends on when she gets parents.
Gender: Female
Personality: Cynder is a silly dragon, a trouble maker.  As a hatchling, she loves to test boundaries and the patience of her fellows, exploring anything and everything.  As she ages, she will learn to be more focused, but still be silly herself.  If cornered, she will try and make any excuse to get away, or appeal to one side to get the two to fight, and slip away.  She is timid of conflict, nervous about meeting others as she fears how they will judge her, but will get over this feeling as an adult.  Basically, Cynder is a calculated goof to get out of unpleasant situations.
Interests: Cynder is interested in learning ways to disable others in a single strike, or learning new vital points in the body to strike.  She also likes to observe others, most of the time undetected to learn and maybe use something against them if she learns a dark secret.   She also loves honey, having tasted it once and adores the sweet taste, sometimes taking a honeycomb just for the tasty treat, but only once she is old enough that her skin is thick enough.
Dislikes: She dislikes lectures, finding it a bore and would rather work that talk about a subject.   She also doesn't like getting very dirty, but will if a mission requires it (later age), but clean herself afterwards.  She also hates others who flaunt their authority and show no respect to the weaker, since she is ridiculed over her lack of scales.
Fears: She fears that if he fails to perform a task, she will be rejected by society and forced to live alone.  While she is used to being alone, she fears being shunned by society (different from being ridiculed)

General Appearance
Height: From ground to shoulder, she is one foot tall (20 feet as an adult)
Scales: There thick and black as night sky but when she turns to dark form there even darker.
Eyes: Purple
Appearance: (subtract the tail sword from pic) Main weapons are her claws and her tail which she uses as a whip.

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Tribe Information and Status
Tribe: Nightwing
Rank: Egg
Family: She does not know who her family truly is, not knowing her biological father or mother (someone can adopt her from NightWing tribe )
Mate: N/A
Hatchlings: N/A

Skills and Abilities
Strengths: Cynder strengths are her lack of weight and flexibility.  Without the burden of a big body, she is able to move faster than that of her fellow drakes, and her agility is better also from her size.  (both ground and in air)  With training, she can hone her attacks to hit vital areas.
Special Abilities: N/A (none so far)
Weaknesses: Her dark side.  Since she has a dark side, she loses her sight of the light.  She can’t control it well at all..
Combat Style: Guerrilla warfare---Ambush and retreat.  She will usually camp a place, then go for a single, fatal strike.  As head on combat with more than one opponent is almost a sure defeat, she would rather retreat.  One on one, she may fight a bit, relying on reflexes to dodge dangerous attacks, and to wound the opponent before retreating so they have trouble following her.  Her attacks almost always go for a vital area, the heart, neck, wing joints, or even ankles before retreating.

Background
History: Not hatched (or adopted by NightWing tribe)
RP Sample: /me She finally gets home and finds her mom waiting for her so sh runs to her and glomps her happily.[/b]

Hello! I am no admin, but I want to give you a response so you can fix things without waiting for them to come and tell you them. As a hatchling, I doubt you would be 14ft tall, especially for a NW. Also, I do recall that there are sentence number reqs for some categories, and same with strengths and weaknesses. I'd recheck the number reqs while waiting for an admin.

Like Au said, this needs some thickening. Death doesn't count as fear as everyone fears death, a way or another, so you need to find something else. 14 feet at a hatchling is way too much, Nightwings are at least 20 feet when adult. Also do not modify the sections' names.
As for the skills, you have a bit too many of them. Different breaths aren't really a thing here, so you'll have to stick with one. Reading minds as it is is way to strong, so unless you put limitations on it I can't accept it. And last thing you'll have to detail your weakness (I mean, no one likes a smack on the head since that's where your symbol is).

DECLINED due to plagiarism.

Remake the special abilities and PM a staff (aside from me) to look at it when done.

Also the combat style is plagiarized. Not sure what else but too busy to check.